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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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Education
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 is becoming nowadays essential day by day and more people are
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attending
attempting
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attending
 colleges in order to get
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education
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 believed that institutions should take exact numbers of male and female students in each and every subject. In
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topic
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 I will discuss
both
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 ideas and give my appropriate idea. Compared to
past
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 , today more and more females are outgrowing men in terms of
education
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,
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development
developement
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development
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economic
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 and
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technology
techonology
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technology
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, in the
past
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 many people used
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think that there should be more
number of
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males than females in every matter because the society is male dominating society and men should be more educated compared to
women
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. Ancestors
also
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 used to believe that
women
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 are only for the
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household
houseold
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household
puposes
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purposes
 and they should not be educated. Discussing
about
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the opposite side the time has completely changed compared to
past
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women
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 are now getting attention in terms of
education
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This
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generations
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people
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 are giving focus to
both
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 ladies and gents. Universities should start accepting
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 equal number of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 but the time is yet to come. By observing
both
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 scenarios I can strongly say that
the
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education
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 institutions should accept
equal
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an equal
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 number of
both
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 boys and girls during each and every class .In the
future
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 we can
forsee
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foresee
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 that
women
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 will dominate males in each and every
terms
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term
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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