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Nowadays many people choose ready made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantage and disadvantage of such a choice?

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There's a saying healthy
food
 promotes healthy living. In
this
, modern century quite a number of
people
 decide to deal with ready-made
food
 than homemade meals.
This
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eassy
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the reasons behind
such
 an ideology and
hence
, highlight the pros and cons that may result from
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such
 choice of living. Due to the nature of some
people
's jobs, less
time
 is been mapped out for cooking at
home
.
For example
, in the city of Lagos most individuals leave early in the morning and come back late at night
in other words
 they find it highly difficult to eat
homemade
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meal
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 because of the limited
time
 schedule resulting due to overpopulation ,
thus
 much traffic is on the high side,
people
 try to be punctual to avoid unnecessary queries
this
 could lead to loss of
one
's job. Again a few numbers of person could have the attributes of laziness and lack of
home
 training. Regardless , there are some advantages to eating ready-made
food
 . It is easily accessible,
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affordable , and lots of varieties are displayed for
one
 to make choices ,especially at
eatery
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such
 as Kilimanjaro and others , some
people
 feel it's economical, and it saves
time
. Again, going out with friends to catch fun and interact with
one
 another.
On the other hand
 , the demerits seem quite outrageous and require more caution and discipline , consuming many cuisines made outside the comfort zone can be disastrous to health,
such
 as obesity.
This
 is a result of too much ingestion of junk,
also
 poor hygiene could lead to stomach upset , and poor brain development and growth for kids due to less balanced nutrients. Lots of
people
 could be at risk of heart diseases due to poor use of vegetable oils. Again, not having a proper manner on how to prepare
home
 cuisine can lead to the loss of friendships and marriages. In summary, healthy
food
such
 as
home
food
 is pivotal to every individual regardless of the
time
 consumption, age and status. notwithstanding,
one
 can enjoy eating out with friends once in a while but not always.
This
 helps to promote the lives and health of the individual in
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society.
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