The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education.
The bar charts illustrate the amount of
unemployment
and average earnings in four different education levels.
Overall
, what is clear from the data is that graduate degree owners were the highest amount of money
earned, while
that group had the least place in the unemployment
rate. On the contrary
, while
the high school graduates
were in the first place, those earned the least money
.
Focusing on the unemployment
rate by education level, high school and some college graduates
had the greatest and the second greatest
rates in 2016 with 5.5% and 4.2%, respectively. Add a hyphen
second-greatest
However
, Graduate degree owners were the group that had the rock-bottom point in the unemployment
rate at 1.2%.
On the other hand
, in average weekly earnings, in spite of the fact that high school graduates
earned the least money
at 500 dollars, graduate degree owners earned the highest amount of money
at 1500 dollars. Also
, college graduates
were the second
highest earners at 1100 dollars.Submitted by cinararabaci7 on
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