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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child.

#children #encouragement #parents #performance #school #pressure #impact #child
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parent’s
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parents
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 exerts pressure on their
children
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children's
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 performance in school because
of
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the amount they spend on their tuition fee makes them have certain expectations concerning their performance in school.
Secondly
, parents usually make
a
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 mistake of comparing their
children
 with other
children
 which
is
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 not appropriate and fair enough
on
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 the
child
.
This
 factor of comparison
as
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has
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 a negative impact on the
child
 , the
child
 begins to feel inferior and their
self esteem
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 will be lost.
Furthermore
, I believe that parents have a vital responsibility to play in their
child
’s performance
such
 as constantly getting involved in the courses they do, taking note of their
weakness
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weaknesses
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, and
also
 encouraging them to do better
boost
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 their
self confidence
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, and zeal to perform well In conclusion, parents
exerts
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 pressure on their
children
 because it is indeed a joy to every parent to see their
child
 do better than them, and
also
 to maintain their reputation in
the
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society.
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