Some peole say that music is a good way of bringing people of diiferent cultures and ages to together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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this

present world, most

people

think that

music

is a good way of bringing

people

of various cultures and ages together. I agree with that point. We have so many reasons that will be discussed in the below paragraphs.

To begin

with, the majority of

people

say that

music

is a good way of bringing society's various cultures and ages together.

Music

is not a language, it can be understood by

everyone

For example

, take classical and devotional. I think in our country,

everyone

likes devotional songs. Some

people

do not know the language, even though they listen to

music

, because it is an art form,not a language.

Everyone

likes to listen to and enjoy

music

Furthermore

, we have some

music

colleges and institutes that invite all religious

people

to learn

music

Some times

Correct your spelling

Sometimes

show examples

they conduct

music

concerts, for that concerts we can see many

people

come to watch.

In addition

, we have some more reasons, like national anthems and songs about the country. When we listen to that type of song,

everyone

gives respect to those songs, irrespective of age and culture, because it shows unity and it indicates we are all one.

For instance

, take our national anthem. When listening to

this

song,

everyone

stands and gives

respect

Correct subject-verb agreement

respects

show examples

to the song because it is our national anthem.

Likewise

, every country has its own national anthems. It shows

people

that we are all one and that there is no difference. In conclusion,

music

is a good way to bring

people

together. I completely agree with that point.

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