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Nowadays fast food is a trend in many places and countries. Many believe that it is affecting our lifestyle and diet too much. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Fast
food
 nowadays is literally everywhere and is almost accessible to everyone. Delicious and fast,
this
 type of
food
 seems to be a combination of the best of both worlds. Whether we are looking for a quick bite or just running low on meal options, these establishments are always there to fill our growling stomachs. As good as it sounds, there are still numerous reasons why they have to be eliminated from our lifestyle and
that is
 why I agree that they indeed destroy our lifestyle. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
fast
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the fast
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 meal is not the best choice for our diet. Fast
food
 is produced quickly for a reason. Mostly premade
thus
 it is safe to assume they are full of preservatives which are unfortunately harmful to our bodies. Another reason why we should avoid it is that it fails to give us the nutrients that we need.
Also
, a lot of research studies have proven that they are more harmful than beneficial. People are often impatient in waiting for several minutes in a restaurant especially when hungry. Fast
food
 may be the answer to
this
 dilemma but still not the safest choice. I would like to encourage people to think more of the long-term effects of the kinds of
food
 that we eat and be warier of its effects on our health system.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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