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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shop online?

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Introduction
Advancement
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 in technology
as
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has
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 made life easier and
individual
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individuals
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 seek the easiest way,
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 brought
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the increment of individuals shopping virtually rather than
physical
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in physical
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 stores.
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of
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individual
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individuals
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 shopping virtually and the
organization
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 they purchase the
goods
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.
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To start with, there
are
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quite
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 number of reasons, individuals purchase
there
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goods
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 virtually, it is less stressful, comfortability, and
it's saves
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it saves
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time
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 and energy. Most
people
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 who are working for like twelve hours a day
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 to spend the majority of
there
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their
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time
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office
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the office
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does
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do
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 not
brings
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bring
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 enough
time
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 to do physical shopping will order
there
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goods
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 virtually and
safes
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saves
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alot
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a lot
 of
time
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 for them. Many virtual
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organization
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organizations
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 run
there
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service
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 for
twenty four
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 hours,
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 gives room for
people
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 to have quick
accessibility
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for
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to
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 any product needed at any
time
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For
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instance
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 many career women
tends
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 to order for
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their
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goods
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 virtually than going to market because the nature of
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their
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 job does not
gives
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that
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them that
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 luxury of
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,
this
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a lot
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a lot
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opportunity
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opportunities
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to
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for
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 the
organization
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running
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there
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service
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 online, the good feedback mechanism will give
such
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organization
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an organization
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 visibility, where many
people
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 can see
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service
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 and patronize them.
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, some of
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this
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these organizations
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organization
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 do not require much capital or some run
it
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apply
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without capital like those
there
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service
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 involves paying before delivery
can
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and can
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 display
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of items which are not available but get it for the individual who has paid for
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 items.
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,
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 opens
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of job opportunities to individual seeking
for
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apply
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job
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a job
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, like doing affiliate marketing with the company and might even
serves
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serve
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 as a side business
to
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for
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 individual. My sister got an offer to be a member of
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organization
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the organization
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 through affiliate marketing,
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 earn her some money to finance her study.
Body · 2
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On
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 the contrary opinion, the virtual use of shopping might
brought
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bring
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 a lot of
disatisfactory
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satisfactory
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 rates in the area of getting the opposite of what ordered,
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 will get to the customer and might not patronize
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organization
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 again. Analytically, some sites are not real they use the opportunity to fraud
people
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patronizing
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by patronizing
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thereself
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there self
herself
 like real
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organization
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organizations
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 and they will fraud many
people
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of
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with
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there
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their
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 money,
people
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 are prone to frauding with
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. My niece once order a nice sleeveless gown virtually and after
payment
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 the
goods
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wasn't
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 delivered and they can not be
track
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 because some are not registered.
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, the company might
lost
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there
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 dignity through the fraudulent act, which
affect
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affects
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 the sales of the
organization
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. Most
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organization
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organizations
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 do not have enough visibility to showcase
there
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their
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goods
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and
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which
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 might be frustrating because of low turn up.
Conclusion
In conclusion, shopping virtually
as
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has
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 a lot of merits but
comparing
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compared
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 to the level of
the
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apply
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cons involved some
people
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 might later venture
in
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into
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 physical stores shopping.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Convenience
  • Retail therapy
  • Cybersecurity
  • Consumer behavior
  • Digital transformation
  • Impulse purchasing
  • Customer base
  • Operational costs
  • Price comparison
  • Shipping and handling
  • Online marketplace
  • User interface
  • Customer satisfaction
  • Cryptocurrency (as newer payment method)
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