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Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar charts provide information about people’s drinking habits across five Australian cities in
previous
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 four weeks. In general, over half of the residents in every city have the habit of going to
café
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, except in
Adelaide
.
Also
, the percentage of people buying instant
coffee
 was always higher than the percentage of people buying fresh
coffee
. In terms of going to
café
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 saw the biggest proportion in Melbourne, with about 64%. Followed by Hobart and Sydney, at 63% and 61% respectively. Meanwhile,
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 for Brisbane is slightly over 55%. And
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 for
Adelaide
 is at about 49% only. Instant
coffee
 purchases,
by comparison
,
was
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favored
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 by more citizens in every city than fresh
coffee
 purchases. In buying instant
coffee
, the figures for Hobart and Brisbane stood the highest, at approximately 54% and 53%. Followed by
Adelaide
, with about 50%. The figures for Melbourne and Sydney are around 48% and 45%.
In contrast
, the percentage of fresh
coffee
 purchases in Melbourne and Sydney are relatively higher than
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 cities, with up to 44% and 43%. As for Brisbane,
Adelaide
 and Hobart, the figures for them in
this
 category were less than 40%, with about 34%, 34.5% and 38% respectively.
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