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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically beneficial. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Nowadays many countries have imported
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 from places all around the world.
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, some people claim that it is more beneficial, environmentally and economically, that customers purchase local
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.In
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 essay, I will discuss why I partially believe that the benefits of eating local
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 outweighs its downsides. If customers are limited to buying
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 only from local suppliers, certainly some of them will be complaining about the inconveniences
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 as lacking
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 choices and failure to reduce immigrants’ homesickness. It is understandable that some people might think that if there is only local
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 on market shelves, they might have to change their previous eating habits and the
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 choice may be monotonous.
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, immigrants who have relied on imported
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 to reduce their homesickness can no longer find the familiar
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 from their hometown.
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, there are
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 plenty of advantages when residents support local agriculture and eat mostly local
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.
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 with, it is much more eco-friendly when the locals consume
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 grown and produced in their villages. By applying
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 action, a large amount of CO2 emission generated from long-distance transportation will be reduced considerably.
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, if the inhabitants mainly rely on the local supply, it will increase the income of local agriculture, which will encourage local farmers to provide better quality
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 at cheaper prices. In my opinion, even taking the main potential disadvantages resulting from the limitation of
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 choice into consideration, the benefits created by increasing local
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 consumption are much more significant. In conclusion, just like most practices in the world, the application of eating local
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 has its downsides and inconveniences.
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, it is, without
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, the significance of the effect resulting from eating local
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such
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 as being more friendly to the environment and improving the local economy can not be overemphasized. As far as I am concerned, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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