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In spite of the advances made in agriculture,many people around the world still go hunger.why is this the case?what can ba done about this problem?

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Currently, despite the developments made in agriculture,
yet
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many around the globe are not able to get food and they go
hunger
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.
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 there are various reasons which make
this
 problem and I will discuss
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them in the following essay.
To begin
 with, the major reason for
this
 problem is
economics
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 disparity between different classes of society. There is no
deny
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 that some people can live a decent life while many are not able to afford a life.
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, these days the cost of utilities and items has almost doubled while the amount of income that each person get has not changed in some areas.
for
instance
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 statistics shows in Chahar Mahal Bakhtiari many of the Citizens can not buy
necessities
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 of life.
in other
words
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 in
this
area
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 everyday
people
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 are facing to lack of water problems and they can not buy proper food or fruit because shipping costs or added to them and these a stuff are considered expensive for these people.
furthermore
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 there are lots of things that government can do to solve these problems but the most effective one is that they should construct New Road in order to make the transportation of goods to deprived areas easier because in
this
 way
cost
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 of shipping will reduce. in conclusion,
economic
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the economic
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 disparity between different classes of society and poor transportation system have created these problems and government can solve
this
 problem by improving the transportation system because in
this
 way the cost of shipping will reduce and it will be easier for Citizens to buy Necessities.
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