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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of world forest and timber in five different nations namely, South Africa, Africa, Asia, Europe and North America.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of world forest and timber in five different nations namely, South Africa, Africa, Asia, Europe and North America.
It can be clearly seen that
Africa
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 and North America both are having the largest ratio of woodlands with 27 % and 25% .In terms of
timber
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, North America is having highest percentage accounting for 30% and
Africa
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 had the lowest figure for sharing
timber
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 (9%). In the other regions, the
forest
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 and
timber
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 rations are more balanced.
The
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Europe contains 18% of
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the world
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world
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forest
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 and 20% of its
timber
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.in terms of world
forest
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, Asia has 14% and
least
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 proportion of
forest
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 (14%) and only 18% of
timber
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 sharing .south
Africa
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 has
marginally
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 slow ratio of
forest
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 with 16% and
highest
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 percentage of 23% for
timber
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.
Overall
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, North America and
Africa
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 are the major sources of world
forest
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due to
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 having the largest proportion,
whereas
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, Asia has
least
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 proportion of
forest
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 share and
Africa
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also
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 has less popularity in
timber
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words africa, timber, forest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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