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It is argued that advertisement is whether a successful or useless tool in terms of making costumers buy the product .In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my point of view that advertisement is not needed stuff.

It is argued that advertisement is a successful or useless tool in terms of making customers buy the product .In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my point of view that advertisement is not needed stuff.
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 ,in some
products
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 mostly when people try it for the
first
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 time advertising may play the key role in consumer's choice as it has no idea in a particular area , and in loads of occasions the trustworthy product will be chosen , and passively or actively listened and recommended product has absolutely more odds to be prefered .
On the other hand
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, there is a great quote where the famous marketer said (Great
products
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 do not require any advertising).
Therefore
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 most used
products
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 ,
such
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 as Aspirine , never needed using advertisement to sell them more,but all expensive alternatives that eliminate headaches in the same way as traditional aspirin does but from other company ,uses all TV,Radio,Billboard pursuing us to buy their commodity . To conclude , I would say that
although
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 in some cases of life it can be detrimental, the majority of the
products
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 are already purchased without any advertising .

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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