advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children

There are different kinds of
video
games
for all ages.
Video
games
have many fans
especially
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in
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children
around the world. Nowadays, every child has at least
one
electronic device like
mobile
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phone or tablet. So, they often have a number of
video
games
on their devices. playing whit
video
games
for them have both advantages and disadvantages. In
this
paper, I will discuss them. There are some advantages
for
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playing
video
games
for
children
in
this
paragraph.
Firstly
, the
children
can learn many
things
from them. as I said before, there are many types of
video
games
. some types of them are educational.
for example
, it's about a
second
language, so the
children
's information about it increases by playing
this
video
game. they learn educational
things
in
this
way better than other methods.
Moreover
,
boost
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of
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brain
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is another advantage. some types of
video
games
are
brain
teaser
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.
Children
should think to be able to do their steps.
Hence
, their
brain
has to process many
things
.
This
work leads to
strengthen
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of the
brain
. Because of the many attractions of
video
games
,
Children
usually play them for many hours. So, there are many drawbacks of them for
children
. I write two of them. The
first
one
is damage to the eyes. As we know
video
games
play on digital screens. Digital screens have
blue
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light.
this
light gradually damages
to
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the eyes especially when we stare at it for many hours. The
second
one
is increasing the immobility of
children
.
The
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video
games
are addictive. When the
children
start to play, it's hard to stop them. They spend a lot of time
to
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playing. They are motionless during the game. Immobility is very bad for them because it causes many losses
that
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one
of the most important of them is obesity. In summary,
the
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video
games
become important amusements for
children
. they have benefits and disadvantages. the benefits of them are learning educational
things
and
strengthen
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of
brain
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the brain
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. The disadvantages of them are
harming
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to
eyes
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the eyes
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and
the
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increase in
the
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immobility.
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