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it is importance to give a chance to act independently and make their own decisions from early age. to what extent do you agree or disagree

#importance #chance #act #decisions #age
In
this
 modern era, people are opting toward the taking decision by themselves
also
 some
children
 act like they are free to take their own decisions.
however
, I completely disagree with
this
 statement
therefore
 I discuss the reasons behind my disagreement in the forthcoming paragraphs. In
this
 modern ,world all people like to live freely , they do not like another person take any decision for them and
also
 they are free to take actions at some particular
age
 when they are eligible and responsible toward their and their family because at
this
age
 they all enough mature and experienced for taking any good or bad actions.
Although
, some
children
 feel that they
also
 do whatever they want in real ,life it is not beneficial for their own development because at that
age
 they do not about what is good and bad for them so if they take any decision so they can be dangerous for them as well as their family.
In addition
, if
children
 take decisions for any kind of situation so they might be possible for their school and carer regard but at that
age
 possibility of getting wrong is higher.
For example
, many countries give rights to their citizens and
children
 to track their own decisions but after some time they know their drawbacks and banned that kind of rule. Apart from that, it is not necessary for pupils to have all knowledge and actions but they are free on sharing their opinions. In conclusion, all pupils do not have all knowledge about their stream so they are easily influenced by others,
therefore
 it is important for their parents to share some quality time with their child to become freely.
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