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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about these problems?

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Some
people
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 say that by paying taxes, the community can benefit enough, while others argue that individuals have more responsibilities and it cannot limit by taxation. In my opinion,
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 paying a
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 can have a significant contribution to
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, there are a variety of activities that can help
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. On the one hand, by paying the
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, governments have enough budget to develop the infrastructure.
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, museums, monuments, public transport systems, education systems, and healthcare need money, and without a taxation system, governments face many problems.
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, a variety of environmental issues can be solved.
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, waste disposal is increasing
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 the population and the state, must take effective measures to tackle
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 problem,
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 as buying automatic waste disposal that need eligible financial power.
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are more activities that
people
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 can do to contribute to
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their community rather than
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 payment.
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, they can involve in community service to help impoverished
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 in their neighbourhood.
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, by recycling and reusing waste material, they can reduce the financial burden
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on their governments, and
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 can lead to a healthier
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.
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, the habitants
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 the country can reduce air pollution by using environmentally-friendly methods.
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, if
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 take walking in commuting
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 of using a private car there will be
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 car
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 in
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. In conclusion,
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tax
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 payment is a decent way to contribute to
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, individuals can take their own steps to help the government to prevent or decline main societal problems.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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