Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. DO you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the present world, there is an ongoing debate regarding
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different medications and cures rather than going to the doctor.
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there are some benefits of
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medicines and
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, I would argue that there are far more drawbacks. The main advantage of different
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is less time-consuming.
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is because the sufferers do not need to spend their time
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in the clinic.
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,
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can take herbal medicines to treat themselves without wasting time in the clinic.
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a terrible headache, and she drank
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herbal drinking
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of checking up by
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, so
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can invest their time in other activities.
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, the cost of
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would be high. The reason why some
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prefer to rely on
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treatments
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is
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method may take less charge due to the fact that using
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medication
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like herbal drugs can be affordable. Despite the positives mentioned above, I believe that
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treatments
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are a negative development for various reasons.
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of all,
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methods are not often reliable. It means that
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therapists often have no
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medical degree to treat the
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it is highly likely that the sufferers face serious damage by
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diagnosis.
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a survey conducted at Cambridge University shows that the rate of
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death who make an unconscious effort
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alternative
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medicines have been increasing
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consulting
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doctors. Provided that
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by the doctors, they will be more assured. As a consequence, going to the doctors can decrease
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tension because of scientific treatment rather than
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treatments
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as acupuncture. In conclusion, while I recognize the possible advantages of different
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, I consider it to be a negative development overall.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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