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Traffic jams are a problem for individuals to use roads freely in major cities. What problems does it have for individuals? How individuals can reduce traffic?

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With the development of major cities, the problem of heavy
traffic
 jams has become a significant issue that
individuals
 come across daily.
Although
 it may cause several challenges for people, including waste of
time
 and money, they are not insurmountable and can be addressed
accordingly
.
To begin
 with,
traffic
 not only consumes a huge amount of
time
 of
individuals
 commuting frequently
,
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but,
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also
 it is a total waste of money.
In other words
, people almost spend hours in
traffic
 every day, while it could be possible to spend
this
 amount of
time
 productively.
For example
, considering people of my home country, Iranians almost spend two hours on average driving to work, the
time
 that could be
otherwise
 dedicated to either accomplishment of projects at work or relaxation to reenergize for
further
 activities.
As a result
, heavy
traffic
 jams may result in various predicaments for
individuals
 in terms of
time
 and budget. Turning to possible remedies, by using public transport
instead
 of their private cars and avoiding unnecessary,
individuals
 can well lessen the severity of deleterious effects of road
traffic
. The issue of heavy
traffic
 on the roads can be dealt with if
individuals
 practice using public transport like the subway as a superb substitute for their own car. More importantly, it is possible to reduce a significant portion of the daily needs of
individuals
 to commute by using modern technologies, like video conferencing and online shopping. To conclude,
although
 the issue of
traffic
 jams is considered a challenging subject for
individuals
 that threaten their
time
 and money, it is not by no means insurmountable.
Individuals
 can shoulder the responsibility and curb their unnecessary daily travels and use public transport.
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