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The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support you position.

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These days, it is argued that the
internet
 has more influence than
television
 on
people
's lifestyles and behaviour.
Although
 there is at least one
television
 in almost every house, personally I believe that
people
 have been attracted to the
internet
 due to the widespread of its applications.In the rest of
this
 ,essay the reasons will be elucidated. On the one hand, today
internet
 has opened its way to
people
's lives through smart gadgets, laptops and smartphones.
Although
 most
people
 are going to work and
consequently
 they have less limited to the
television
, they are able to get information by their smartphones or laptops which are connected to the
internet
.
Thus
, they are dealing with free wold containing more data than
television
 with limited filtered programs.individuals of a different range of ages are looking for their favourite content on the
internet
 since enthusiasm brings concentration, and the possibility of engaging with cyber content has been increased.
on the other hand
, there are enough programs available for any individuals on the
television
 platforms they have to wait for a specific time to see their likely favourite
television
 show.
This
 is the reason why
people
 are disappointed by
television
 and ,
consequently
 they tend to watch everything they need through
internet
-based platforms. to conclude,
although
 the importance and utilization of
television
 can not be denied, the
internet
 provides more easily accessible information for individuals who want to get information. so
i
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I
show examples
 believe that the
internet
 has more influence on
people
's life.
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