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You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping centre near your home. Write a letter to the council. In your letter say how you heard about the plan explain how you feel about it ask for more information about it

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Respected Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to seek more details on the development projects planned for Maiden Society. I came to know from local media that the construction of a shopping centre by a private builder is scheduled to start
this
 December. I read an article in the local leading newspaper about it. The editor compared the previous malls built by the ABC company and the detrimental impacts they are causing to the environment. I was shocked to read the details.
According to
 the article, the association did not even bother to work towards basic eco-friendly techniques. Perhaps, the current green area of Central Park is allowed to the builder which in itself made me furious about the project. I would appreciate obtaining any additional information concerning
this
 project, especially the city's government position in relation to its involved costs,
besides
 the situation of local parks in the city.
In addition
, I might
also
 be aware of
what's
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plan we might expect so that household residents not be affected by continual noise when
this
 place is finished.I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rubina Gill
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coherence cohesion
Improve the structure of the greeting and closing in the letter. Ensure that it adheres to formal letter writing conventions.
task response
The response to the task is generally good, but additional details about the specific impacts on the local area and the writer's personal concerns could enhance the response.
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