Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the work. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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are became out of use . There is a point of view that

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life will be easier. In my opinion, there are some reasons why I disagree with

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idea. Namely, less diversity in cultures,

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, some people have another point of view that

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the following essay will be discussed. In some

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there are many

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that I believe it has

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some individuals use

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will be destroyed .

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, in Iran people speak Farsi for about 2500 years if Farsi died out , all

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would become destroyed.

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of people cultures

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of many

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, and it can make income for countries' economic.

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some individuals believe it

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some drawbacks.

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, when in the country there are many

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, the unit between ones will be

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difficult

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it is better all of

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there are 10 type of

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of these

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think themself are better than other speakers.

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less user

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it will become

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distinct

after a long run. In conclusion,

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despite

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despite

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aspects

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benefits are more and governments should place

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powerful laws and budget for it .

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Linguistic diversity
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Monolithic global culture
Language extinction
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