Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the work. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Every year some
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it is better
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life will be easier. In my opinion, there are some reasons why I disagree with
this
idea. Namely, less diversity in cultures,
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of
history
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.
However
, some people have another point of view that
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country
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there are many
languages
that I believe it has
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plenty
pleanty
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plenty
of positive aspects.
Initially
,
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language
languege
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language
is
part
of the
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history
and for
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a lot
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a lot
of
years
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some individuals use
this
language
thus
when a language
die
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out , some
part
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people’s
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people’
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people's
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history
will be destroyed .
For instance
, in Iran people speak Farsi for about 2500 years if Farsi died out , all
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history
would become destroyed.
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Additionally
,
toungs
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tongs
is
part
of people cultures
as a result
variety in
languag
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language
help the
culteral
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cultural
diversity ,
therefore
it
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attention
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of many
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, and it can make income for countries' economic.
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some individuals believe it
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has
hase
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has
some drawbacks.
Firstly
, when in the country there are many
languages
, the unit between ones will be
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difficult
difficulats
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difficult
. Especially in the
work places
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.
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result
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it is better all of
country
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members speake one
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.
For example
, in
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Iran
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iran
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there are 10 type of
languages
and each
speakers
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speaker
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of these
languages
think themself are better than other speakers.
Secondly
, protection of one
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that
have
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less user
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fewer users
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is hard and
need
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needs
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a high
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budget
bodget
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body
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as a result
it will become
destinict
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distinct
after a long run. In conclusion,
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despite
despit
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despite
of some negative
aspacts
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aspects
that diversity in
languages
has ,
it's
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benefits are more and governments should place
the
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powerful laws and budget for it .
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