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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many
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 argue over whether travelling foreigners should take on the tradition and customs of the indigenous population .
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 might think
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, I hold the opinion that visitors and tourists should generally follow the natives' culture for the following reason . The main reason why the
people
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 from distant lands should be willing to adapt to the new environment is that they will be accepted by the native community with open hearts. Since human beings are territorial, they are observant of anyone who comes to their land;
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, they act with caution and remain on guard till the foreigners are among them.
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, the best way to overcome
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 hurdle is to appreciate, respect, and take up some of the local's practices or customs to blend into their society. Resultantly, these
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 will over time come to be comfortable with
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 presence, develop long-lasting alliances, and open new business opportunities or employment.
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, those
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 who do not pay heed to
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 to a new area's culture have led to some undesirable outcomes.
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, the Muslim and Hindu communities of India are always at each other's throats because of their cultural dissimilarities.
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, there are monthly reported cases of violence where these two communities are living together.
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 is due to the alienation of each other from each side, which has led to the development of hostilities and distrust among
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the community
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. To conclude, I believe that
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visitor
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 should be willing to accept new traditions and cultures for the
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 they are visiting, as it will help them and the native
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 to come together and share a similar perspective.
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