In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is true that lots of people in the world are hungry though the development in agriculture

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fast. There are a variety of reasons for

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, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem.

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main reasons that cause

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terrible phenomenon.

Firstly

, the primary factor is that our world population is

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increasing sharply.

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, our assignment of food

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. The rich countries are becoming richer while the poor countries are becoming poorer.

Finally

, our environment is

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surface from destruction, especially

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soil degradation.

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this

problem cannot be solved.

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controlling

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the growth of

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, balancing the food distribution and recovering our environment, we

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continue making progress in agriculture,

such

as cultivation without soil and improvement

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seeds.

Furthermore

, everyone in our world must

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save food. In conclusion, our

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will continue to face the hunger problem unless we take effective measures,

such

as controlling the population and developing the technology, to solve it.

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Your opinion

In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed. In which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion ?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

Every country should have a free health service; even if that means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree with this statement?