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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern society,
people
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 tend to eat at fast
food
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 restaurants because of the fast pace of their lives. There are both advantages and disadvantages to
choose
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 fast
food
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 as
main
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the main
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meals
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meal
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.
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, in my opinion,
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people
peolpe
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people
 have more negative effects compared to
the
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positive ones in terms of
healthy
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. Fast
foods
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 are loved by many
people
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 around the world. One of the biggest reasons why they are willing to eat is spending a little time. Junk
food
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 is always available
at
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anywhere.
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, Macdonald's
place
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places
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 a lot of restaurants on the earth.
Thus
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,
people
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 are able to access
to
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the
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food
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 whenever they want.
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,
people
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 would have their
meals
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 in less than 10 minutes since they ordered.
On the other hand
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, in comparison to other
meals
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, it is clear that fast
foods
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 are unhealthy. It usually uses high calories ingredients,
such
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 as cheese and meat.
In addition
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 to that, all restaurants use tons of oils to cook. So, it gives more calories to
meals
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.
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, when eating at
Macdonalds
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Macdonald's
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, if
people
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 order their
meals
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, which
includes
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include
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humbargers
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hamburgers
, sugary drinks, and french fries, the calories must be beyond what
people
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 usually must take in one meal. In conclusion, because
people
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's modern lives are
in
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at
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 a fast pace, many
people
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are
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rely on fast
foods
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 for their main
meals
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. I believe that, though it is easy to take and eat in a short term, fast
foods
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 are unhealthy
foods
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 compared to
the
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other
meals
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.

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