Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There are many
people
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think
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who think
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that social
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networks
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can improve
teenager
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relationships.
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, some
people
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think
that is
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bad for them. In my opinion, I completely think that social media is good for children to improve their relationships with
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others
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.
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, there are a lot of different
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who like to play
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on social
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medias
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media
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in different countries. So, when children use
them
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, like Facebook, Twitter or Telegram, they can make many new
friends
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.
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there are some bad
people
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.
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, I like using
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telegrams
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to make
friends
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. They not only come from local but
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come from different countries,
such
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as Australia, USA and Japan.
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, I think
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can meet
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on
internet
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the internet
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. Secondarily, there are some
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think
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who think
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that they cannot meet new
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in
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social
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the social
a social
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network
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networks
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.
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,
people
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not only can meet
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in
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online but
also
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can invest them to job some activities in
real
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world.
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, I have two to three telegram groups. They like to open some activities to let
people
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to
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join that like hiking, playing
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board games
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boardgames
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board games
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and birthday
party
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parties
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. In these activities, I meet a lot of new
friends
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. I can deeply to know more about them or know more
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about each
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other like what they like. So, I think
social
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the social
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network
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networks
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can allow us to become
more
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apply
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closer
with
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to
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other To conclude, I think teenagers can make different
friends
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to
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build up relation in online. It is
a
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one of the good ways to allow
people
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to make
friends
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