“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.
This
goes without saying that the prevention of various diseases is a viable and cheaper option than spending a huge chunk of money on its treatment. In my opinion, the cost should be allocated in
specialised sectors Change preposition
to
such
as education and physical sports to promote healthy
Add an article
a healthy
lifestyle
and to discourage unhealthy choices Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
for example
tobacco. One way of promoting knowledge is to create mandatory programs for kids from elementary
level would provide self-awareness Correct article usage
the elementary
about
Change preposition
apply
themselves
. The reason behind Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
idea is to make them aware of the choices they will make and how it
will affect their lives. Correct pronoun usage
they
This
will also
develop a sense of self care
both towards themselves Add a hyphen
self-care
as well as
in their surroundings. Secondly
, it has also
been seen that many researchers and scientists conduct studies and spend years and years to obtain results, and upon final
step they discover that not only the methods have Correct article usage
the final
been
failed but Unnecessary verb
apply
also
they are dangerous for future generations. These life threatening
issues could make children Add a hyphen
life-threatening
disable
from birth. Wrong verb form
disabled
Lastly
, research and exploration for any disease demand exorbitant investment. Both in terms of money and time, hence
it may end up bankrupting any Rephrase
apply
countries
assets and Change noun form
country's
their
wealth. Correct pronoun usage
apply
For instance
, the recent pandemic caused uncontrollable
crisis in developing and underdeveloped countries for the sake of creating one “vaccine”. Add an article
an uncontrollable
the uncontrollable
Till
Change preposition
To
date
many countries are still facing issues economically and financially. Add a comma
date,
To conclude
, big organizations and governments should allocate a large quota of investment in programs which help reducing
the illness from Wrong verb form
reduce
beginning
. Add an article
the beginning
This
measure will help reducing
the cost of expensive treatments Wrong verb form
reduce
as well as
create healthy
educated environment.Add an article
a healthy
the healthy
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