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International student enrolment in British universities 2009-2014

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The bar chart illustrates how many
students
 from other countries enter the
university
 in the UK in the years 2009 and 2014. Overall, is notable that in 2014 there is a fluctuation generally increasing the
students
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number of students
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 entering the
university
 in
the
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most of the UK cities with one exception which is Cardiff whit a decrease of 1.5
percentage
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.
Firstly
, the
university
 of Glasgow,
edingbourogh
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Edinburgh
Edinborough
, Birmingham and Huddersfield manage to increase their number of
students
 enrolled which is significantly high
compare
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compared
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 to the year 2009. Birmingham had a rise of 4
percent
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per cent
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 while Glasgow and
edingbourgh
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Edinburgh
 reach the same
percentage
 of 6
percent
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per cent
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. Huddersfield
increase
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increases
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 his
students
 as well with a 2
percent
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per cent
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 more or less. Is notable that the
university
 with the highest
percentage
 of enrolment is Brighton with
a
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12 and 13%.
On the other hand
, in two
thound
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thousand
 and nine
year
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years
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, Liverpool and Birmingham reach the same
percentage
 of
students
 registered while
huddensfiield
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Huddersfield
 in
england
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England
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 had the lowest student enrolled rate,
in contrast
 with
leeds
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Leeds
less
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university
 which was the
second
university
 with the highest numbers of international
students
 joining them.
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