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Then self working is not for everyone. People should think twice choosing the decision about their career.

#self #people #decision #career
Nowadays being
an
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independent in
work
 or
self
-employment is one of
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the option
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option
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 that considers rather
working
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than working
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 for the
company
. The condition happened caused by many reasons
such
 as
company
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 environment,
career
 expectations and
the
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flexibility
on
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of
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work
. Many
workers
 thought having freedom
on
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work
 is one of the main goals when they
work
 for someone or a
company
. The
freely
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work
 which has
work
 and life balance is important
things
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 today.
People
 will easily compare their job,
career
 paths and responsibilities on social media. In long term, those will create assumptions
of
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about
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 the
career
 story of
people
.
Furthermore
,
company
order
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 for the staff that should always produce become an unhealthy situation for
workers
 and turn in down the worker's flexibility. Those are reasons why
people
 prefer to
work
 with their
self
 than engage with the
company
. As opposed some
people
 argue that
self
 employee has many two side implications for staff. The
people
 will lack
of
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social skills because of the
self
-centre orientation.
However
,
the
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social skill is not only related
with
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to
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 the
work
 stuff. Another disadvantage of being
an
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self
-worker is decreased productivity motivation and a sense of competition. It will happen because the worker has no partner to share with about the jobs. The employee has no role model, supervisor and
also
an
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advisor on their
work
. Working by
self
 can be a boomerang for those who has insecurities and problem with
themselfself
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the self self
. In summary,
self
 an employee has several pros and cons for
workers
. Despite the flexibility and support fully of worker passion. It has conditions that should be considered with the social life of
workers
.
Then
self
-working is not for everyone.
People
 should think twice about choosing the decision about their
career
.
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