plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of air and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree ?
Nowadays, one of the essential pollutions of the air and the sea is the shopping plastic pouch. It's believed by some people it should be banned. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
, because they are not able to dissolve easily biologically, causing animals
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animals'
animal's
death
, producing or moving them to garbage dumps is very costly, and they are not renewable.
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deaths
Firstly
, plastic has no ability to dissolve easily biologically, they
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it
last
over 1000 years to break down into small particles, and after that, they do damage to the soil, water and natural habitats. Correct subject-verb agreement
lasts
furthermore
, their ability to fly from garbage cars and dumps in the air could be dangerous to the birds and to the natural view. some sea creatures like marine mammals often mistake them for food. for example
, an aquatic turtle may think it is a jellyfish, which is its favourite food. thousands of animals die every year due to
this
kind of pollution.
On the other hand
, the methodology of producing and transferring them costs a lot of money. to
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To
need
electricity, and carrying them from one place to another needs petrol which is not a renewable resource. Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
moreover
, Plastic bags are not renewable either, which means they cannot be easily recycled like paper one
. They are made of petrochemicals, which is what makes them non-renewable and a risk to the health of the plant.
In conclusion, I agree Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
pouch must be banned, they aid to
huge damage to the health of the Verb problem
cause
plant
, by killing animals and polluting the air, soil and water.Fix the agreement mistake
plants
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