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Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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The bar chart illustrates how many phones of famous marks as
Samsung
, Apple,
Nokia
, LG and ZTE were sold in 2009, 2011 and 2013. Overall, it is clear from the graph, that the brands "
Samsung
" and "
Nokia
" are by far more popular than another three.
However
, the sales of
Nokia
 and LG fell down over the years,
in contrast
 to
Samsung
 and Apple. At the beginning of showed period,
Nokia
 has the highest sales score,
what
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 was about 440,
then
 it declined a bit to 420, but four years later
this
 value achieved the point 250. Astonishingly, the
sale
Fix the agreement mistake
sales
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 tendency of
Samsung
 has developed in the opposite direction, as it increased from 225 in 2009 to 450 in 2013. Another significant feature on the chart is the rapid rising of
Correct article usage
the Apple-trend
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Apple-trend
Correct your spelling
Apple trend
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. Unless
this
 brand had the lowest value in 2009, over the four years it grew by 125 to 150,
what
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 means, that Apple mobile phones become in demand. Only by
ZTE
Add a comma
,ZTE
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 the sale tendency
remained
Wrong verb form
remain
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 relatively stable so that the number of sold mobile phones came from 50 to 55 in
this
 period of time.
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