Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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The bar chart illustrates how many phones of famous marks as
Samsung
, Apple,
Nokia
, LG and ZTE were sold in 2009, 2011 and 2013. Overall, it is clear from the graph, that the brands "
Samsung
" and "
Nokia
" are by far more popular than another three.
However
, the sales of
Nokia
and LG fell down over the years,
in contrast
to
Samsung
and Apple. At the beginning of showed period,
Nokia
has the highest sales score,
what
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which
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was about 440,
then
it declined a bit to 420, but four years later
this
value achieved the point 250. Astonishingly, the
sale
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sales
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tendency of
Samsung
has developed in the opposite direction, as it increased from 225 in 2009 to 450 in 2013. Another significant feature on the chart is the rapid rising of
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the Apple-trend
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Apple-trend
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Apple trend
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. Unless
this
brand had the lowest value in 2009, over the four years it grew by 125 to 150,
what
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which
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means, that Apple mobile phones become in demand. Only by
ZTE
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,ZTE
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the sale tendency
remained
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remain
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relatively stable so that the number of sold mobile phones came from 50 to 55 in
this
period of time.
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