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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel aborad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
travel
 industry is booming in all parts of the world for the past few years. It is believed that in the coming years' travellers will rather choose to spend their holiday in their own country or visit foreign
countries
. According to ,me few
people
 will tend to
travel
 outside their
countries
, on the other hand, some masses will visit their own
countries
.
To begin
 with ,visiting foreign nations is getting costly nowadays, though
people
 who are willing to
travel
 outside will definitely visit. Attractions outside the home country are getting more and more developing. According to a report by New York Times, in the year ,2015 the most visited place in the world was Times Square, New York ,
however
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 it showed that most of the visitors were outside of the United States.Another example states that the highest number of
people
 who visited every country were from China.
This
 data shows that
people
 from all over the world will flock to a different nation.
On the other hand
, due to increasing population and rising costs of fuel , travelling has become much costlier. Due to the pandemic travellers have become more aware and more conscious in terms of safety, health as well as the cost of staying outside.The major reason that comes into my mind is
a
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crime as it has become a global issue.
For instance
, tourists in France are facing multiple problems while exploring the streets as they face issues of pocket cutters as well as stabbing. To conclude
with
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, I completely disagree with
this
 statement. Despite the
problems
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 tourists face while travelling outside the
countries
 more and more visitors tend to
travel
 outside in upcoming years.
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