Some educationalists think that international exchange visits benefits teenagers at the school. To what extent do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In our modern society, it is quite easy to visit
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thanks to the
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of transportation systems. Some experts believe that international exchange experiences give
students
wonderful effects at
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school. I significantly agree with the idea that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
First
of all, it makes
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good opportunity to learn
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. The situation that teenagers need to speak
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able to improve their language skills dramatically.
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recent research conducted by the Japanese government shows that
students
who belong to the school accepting international
students
can get a 30 % higher score than
students
who do not.
Thus
,
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makes clear that pupils can learn
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rapidly because of international exchange visits.
Moreover
,
students
can learn
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cultures due to it.
For instance
, they are able to talk with foreigners with
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varieties
of ideas even though it is difficult to have
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opportunity if we live in Japan.
Moreover
, It has
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that people who
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a lot of
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with foreigners can improve their critical thinking as well as good communication skills, which leads to getting high-salary jobs.
Therefore
, it has become apparent that the experience makes
students
mature for their future. In conclusion, we discussed the advantages of international
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visits in terms of language skills and learning
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cultures. For those two reasons, I believe that the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages greatly. After a
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through
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analysis of
this
subject, it is predicted that the number of international exchanges will be increased.
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