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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits benefits teenagers at the school. To what extent do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In our modern society, it is quite easy to visit
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 thanks to the
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 of transportation systems. Some experts believe that international exchange experiences give
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 wonderful effects at
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school. I significantly agree with the idea that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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 of all, it makes
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 good opportunity to learn
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. The situation that teenagers need to speak
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 able to improve their language skills dramatically.
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recent research conducted by the Japanese government shows that
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 who belong to the school accepting international
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 can get a 30 % higher score than
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 who do not.
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 makes clear that pupils can learn
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 rapidly because of international exchange visits.
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,
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 can learn
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 cultures due to it.
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, they are able to talk with foreigners with
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 opportunity if we live in Japan.
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, It has
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 that people who
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 a lot of
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 with foreigners can improve their critical thinking as well as good communication skills, which leads to getting high-salary jobs.
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, it has become apparent that the experience makes
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 mature for their future. In conclusion, we discussed the advantages of international
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 visits in terms of language skills and learning
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 cultures. For those two reasons, I believe that the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages greatly. After a
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 analysis of
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 subject, it is predicted that the number of international exchanges will be increased.
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