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It is more effective if doctors do rounds (see patients in the hospital) in pairs, not individually. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#doctors #rounds #patients #pairs
Good
communication
skills
 are very important for a
doctor
 in his/her medical practice but those
skills
 can not replace deep
knowledge
 in his/her specialization. What is important for the safety of
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the patient
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patient
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patients
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 is the correct
diagnosis
 and
the
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good
treatment
 without complication. The deep
knowledge
 of a
doctor
 is essential to assure the correct examination
conducted
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,
good
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a good
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diagnosis
made
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is made
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 and a good
treatment
chose
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. Almost all
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symptoms
systems
symtomes
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symptoms
 can be found and correctly evaluated by a good
doctor
 without good
communication
skills
.
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 on that evaluation, a
doctor
 can make a good
diagnosis
 and choose
a
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 correct
treatment
 for
patient
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the patient
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. I still remember some experiences I had during my training time abroad. Due to the language barrier, I could not have
a
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good
communication
 with
patients
 and I had a lot of
difficulty
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difficulties
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to explain
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 to the
patient
 what I need from their history
and
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I could not explain what the
patient
 should do to help
doctor
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the doctor
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 to make a
diagnosis
. But with
a
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good experience and efficient
knowledge
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,knowledge
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 I could
finally
 conduct a correct examination and make a good
diagnosis
 for those
patients
. In
others situation
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other situations
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, we can see that some students with
a
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good
communication
skills
 without enough experience and medical
knowledge
 can get
complains
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complaints
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 from the
patient
 when they made some mistakes during the examination and
treatment
.
How ever
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,
a
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good practice with deep
knowledge
 could not always bring
a
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satisfaction
of
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patients
. We've already had some painful
lession
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lesson
lessons
 in
this
 situation.
A
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 experienced
doctor
 can make some small mistakes or even without making
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a mistake
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mistake
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mistakes
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 there may be some complications for
patient
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the patient
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. In that situation,
the
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good
communication
skills
 can help to avoid
the
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misunderstanding
from
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patients
 and their
family
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families
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. When the
patient
 is aware of the risks of procedures they have to go through, they will be ready to cooperate with
doctor
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the doctor
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 and accept some possible complications.
Although
 having
a
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good
communication
skills
 is important in medical practice,
a deep
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deep knowledge
a piece of deep knowledge
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knowledge
in
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of
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 a specialization of a
doctor
 is more important and essential for the success of the
treatment
.
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