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It is more effective if doctors do rounds (see patients in the hospital) in pairs, not individually. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Dortors
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Doctors
 do rounds in pairs is performed in most
the
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 hospital
i
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 know. They help to take care
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of patient
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patient
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patients
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 more effective.There are some
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disadvantages
disavantages
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disadvantages
 but
i
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 agree that
doctors
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 should be done rounds in pairs
instead
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 of individually.
Body · 1
In my
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opinion
opnion
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opinion
, when
dortors
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doctors
 work in
group
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a group
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 will prevent errors. They can discuss with each other to give the most optimal treatment. In the case of
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a doctor
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doctor
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doctors
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 working not in
group
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the group
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, it is very
danggerous
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dangerous
 to treat a disease they do not know. They will make a lot of mistakes that harm the
patient
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Beside
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,
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your
yuong
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young
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doctor
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doctors
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 can learn from more experienced
doctors
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 via
the
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apply
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discussion.
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The
patient
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 must to monitored continuously. If the
dortor
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doctor
doctors
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in
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apply
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individually will miss
course
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the course
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 of the disease. Because the
doctors
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 are people too. They
also
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 need rest
,
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 or get sick.
Due to they
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are help
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help
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 each other in case they can continue to treat the
patient
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.
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One
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other
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the other
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 hand, in a state of
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emergency
emrgency
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emergency
, it is better to involve more than one
doctor
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..
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.
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Doctors
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 will execute multiple medical at the same time. When they do
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surgery
sugery
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surgery
 or
trick
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tricks
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they help each other better. If individually
doctor
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 can not
perfom
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perform
 surgery or trick.
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in
Conclusion
Conclusion
doctors
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 must be done rounds in pairs to bring the most effective treatment
for
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to
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the patient
a patient
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patient
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patients
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.
This
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 need to be applied in
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healthcare
helthcare
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healthcare
 facilities around the world.

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