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In recent times, many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have a positive or negative effects on the society

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Nowadays, many individuals are resolving to live solitarily due to several reasons.
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this
 trend as well as its adverse impact on
the
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society. The major reasons for choosing a solitary
life
 are
for
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control, freedom, and independence.
In other words
, the liberty to
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solely
soley
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solely
 decide and choose one’s
life
 regardless of
other’s
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opinion
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 is the utmost desire of many. So, they rent their private apartment to enjoy the freedom of choosing their style of living, menu, decorations etc.
Also
, they want to be independent and shoulder their responsibility as
this
 attribute will build their self-esteem and emotional balance.
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, a record reveals that 80% of the youth in Nigeria live by themselves immediately after college.
Consequently
, a
solitude
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life
 has an adverse effect on the community. The reason is
because
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 it facilitates loneliness and social isolation. Because many are lonely and friendless, they indulge themselves in an unhealthy lifestyle like eating
junks
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, excessive screen time and unhealthy relationships.
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, a record shows that 80% of graduates in America are obese and 60%
suffers
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 heartbreaks In conclusion, a
solitude
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life
 is good as it brings about a sense of freedom. Control and independence, but it is detrimental to
the
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society because it causes loneliness and social isolation.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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