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Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?

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Nowadays there is a dramatic
raise
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rise
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 in anti-social
behavior
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behaviour
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 and
lack
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a lack
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 of
respect
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to
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 each other because of many cases.
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, there are some solutions to tackle
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 problem. ​
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,
people
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 become anti-social and do not know how to pay
respect
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 to others because of the inventions of technology.
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, children who are born
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these days are more addicted to using mobile phones than children who are born in the olden days. After that, they pay attention to it rather than
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people
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the people
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 who are in their surroundings.
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, they prefer using computers or watching movies at home to spending
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 with their friends or family
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outside.
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, they will not understand the gentle
behavior
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 which shows their identity if they are not sociable with their surroundings. And
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, their communication skills will be decreased and do not know how to pay
respect
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 to others. ​
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, they need to apply these inventions both usefully and wisely and attempt to participate in social activities.
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,
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in spite
inspite
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in spite
 of using motor cars to go somewhere which is quite near to the house, it is better to walk with their neighbours. When they can manage their
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 smartly, they will have extra
time
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 to learn about
people
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 who are in their environment.
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, trying to reduce screen
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such
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 as watching movies and playing games is one of the best attempts to communicate with
people
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.
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, there are many social activities which can participate in
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 as joining
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sport
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 clubs, participating the volunteer teams and helping the charity. ​ In conclusion,
people
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 become anti-social and do not know how to pay
respect
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 to each other because of the way they apply the inventions of technology.
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, they can reduce their problems if they follow the
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solutions
soultions
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solutions
 that are mentioned above.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Anti-social behavior
  • Lack of respect
  • Instilling values
  • Discipline
  • Supervision
  • Media influence
  • Behavioral issues
  • Moral education
  • Community engagement
  • Economic disparity
  • Frustration and alienation
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