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Some people believe that medical doctors should also be academic researchers at the same time. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #doctors #researchers #time
A medical
doctor
 could be at the same
time
 a physician and an academic
rechercher
Correct your spelling
researcher
 but
this
 is not true for every MD. A good
doctor
 could be only a good physician without academic research. Academic research
need
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needs
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some
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apply
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more skills than those a good physician need in their practice
for example
 researcher need
time
 to collect data, good skills for data analysis and they need to spend more
time
 on writing... A good
doctor
need
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needs
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 to spend
time
to read
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reading
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book
Add an article
the book
a book
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,
update
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and update
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 their knowledge by reading new publications bet those activities do not mean academic
researches
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research
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.
A
Correct article usage
Doctor
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doctor
 should spend
time
 updating their knowledge, examining patients and
take
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taking
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 care of them.
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