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Some people believe that medical doctors should also be academic researchers at the same time. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #doctors #researchers #time
In recent years, an increasing number of
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 taken part in
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, so being an academic researcher is very
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necessary
 for a medical
physican
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physician
. I totally agree with
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. There are some reasons why
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 should do
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.
Firstly
, medical
doctors
 need to keep their knowledge up to date.
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,
physicans
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physicians
 need to look for accurate information and scientific evidence.
Secondly
,
doctor
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 need to know how to synthesize and analyze data from multi-dimensional information sources to make
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 decisions for their
patients
. When doing
research
, they will advance these skills. There were some studies
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 that ordinary
doctors
 who do not have
research
 ability often practice by
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, they do not
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 and do not use evidence-based medicine. These lead to inaccurate diagnostic,
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 treatment methods and sometimes,
patients
 have to suffer from fogy protocols. It is important for
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 to become
a
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 for other reasons. In
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clinical practices, there will arise a lot of complicated situations, questions that
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modern
 science could not answer,
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 need to be studied to find answers. If a
doctor
 is
also
 a researcher, his or her study will be associated with serving the
benifits
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benefits
benefit
 of
patients
 and their
research
's purpose is to solve urgent medical problems.
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 side, if they are not
doctors
, the
research
 objects may be impractical, wasting time and money,
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 focusing on the
patients
. In conclusion, being a
doctor
 who can do clinical
research
 is essential in the
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modern
 medical
enviroment
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environment
.
This
 will bring many advantages to
patients
,
as well as
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doctor's
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 updated skills and
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 hard situations in clinical practice. I hope more and more
doctors
 realize these issues and hospital
leader
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leaders
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 should create
reseaching
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researching
 conditions.
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