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Some people believe that medical doctors should also be academic researchers at the same time. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #doctors #researchers #time
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It is true that a good doctor is not only good at expertise but
also
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 a scientist. Personally, I completely agree with
this
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 view
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, all the medical knowledge
have
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 been the result of
millions
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the millions
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study
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 of many doctors past
until
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apply
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now. The
deseases
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diseases
 are changed and tend to be more complicated, the doctor
have
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 to
study
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 more and more to
upgrage
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upgrade
 their skill.
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, the covid 19 pandemic is caused by
coronavirus
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, it
have
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 many types of virus, and each
types
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type
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,
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 and the
reseachers
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researchers
 have to
study
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 to produce
vaccins
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vaccines
 against the pandemic.
furthermore
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, if doctors want to apply
the
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an
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update
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 procedure
,
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 or a new medicine, they have to
study
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about
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their
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the
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 effects,
side-effects
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and side-effects
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 of
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this
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 drugs, and
then
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 share their experience
for
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with
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 other colleagues about it in an article in a scientific journal. It is a good way to contribute to the development of global
medical
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. In conclusion, for the
resons
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reasons
 I have mentioned above, I maintain that doctors should
also
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 be
a
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an
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 academic
scientist
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scientists
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 in the same time
with
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apply
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practicing
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practising
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 clinical skills.
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