A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts Say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to offer some valuable feedback on spending a certain amount of money on the children’s

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team or open-air

concerts

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by a large company in my region.

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with, I would like to suggest that there are many benefits of sponsoring the

sports

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team in a local area.

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, it makes children participate easily in

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daily like playing badminton or basketball after they finish school.

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, the children can be healthier both mental and physical by playing

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near their area.

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, by summarising the advantages of spending some budget on

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in a community area,

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such

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as music or other kinds of

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make the children to be happy and even can motivate them when they are getting depression. Because both have merits, in my opinion, an organization should spend the budget on both a local

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team and

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by allocating money. I hope my insight will be valuable. Yours faithfully Sandar Myint

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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