In some countries, more young adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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who have been graduated usually
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look for an independent space to live on their own. But in
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countries, there is a staggering number of
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who still live with their
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. While
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trend might bring some certain benefits, I still believe that the drawbacks overweight the benefits. On the
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house with their own
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expenses. While other adults have to pay many types of bills, it could be shared
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everyone in a family. It
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young adults to save money so they could invest
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their own business. It
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easier for everyone in the family to support and take care of each other. Living with their
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, youngsters could receive advice which will
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for their future.
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, living with
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could cause some tremendous problems.
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, youngsters will be reliant on their
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, they may not have to do
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as doing laundry or washing dishes.
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for them if they have to move out and live alone. Living with their
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make being less confident which may cause
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in problem-solving or decision-making. Compare with
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who live alone, they might feel less confident. In conclusion,
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young
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can receive some financial and mental support from family members, I think it more advisable
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them to live alone after graduating which will lead them to a life of independent lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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