IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Some people think that large sporting Iinternational events could cause problems to the hosting country and it is not worth hosting such events. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #events #country
A few experts believe that a huge number of sporting worldwide events cause problems for the hosting
country
moreover
, it is not worthy of the hosting
country
.In
this
 ,
eassy
Correct your spelling
essay
easy
 I will discuss whatever I agree or disagree with
that
Change preposition
from that
show examples
 point of view. In general,it can be clearly seen that hosting any type of event as like
sports
 are not easy to manage . Because, hosting the sporting events may face many difficulties
such
 as surety the security, arranging hotels for the visitor's residence etc.Many times a large number of
teams
 come to a sportsmanship
country
 holding the arrangements.As many
teams
 come to a
country
 and the insist
country
 should have to follow the schedule given by the
sports
 chairman. By hosting it,the
nation
 has to face the big problem after all
this
 happening when the result comes it cause being loss to the holder
country
.Because these kinds of
sports
 do not pair well with the hosting
country
 with the rules prepared by the chairman.
This
 is not fair to the holder
country
 because apply by arranging all the requirements for the
teams
,all residents,all about security and other different affairs that the
country
 face . In short,I agree with that type of discussion and I am perfectly sure about all
this
 happened in the hosting
country
 and
this
 is not affordable for a poor
country
.
However
, when the
sports
teams
 come to that
nation
 all the concentration of the
nation
 kept on the
teams
 for caring all about their responsibilities and all those problems of a
nation
 like as poor economy, political instability etc .Whenever these
teams
 went and they set the bills of all their affairs
as a result
 it remains a loss of it. In conclusion,I agree with that kind of discussion about the
sports
 team's visit to a poor
country
 resulting in a loss of all affairs.
Submitted by naeem14.akram on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: