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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? what makes a successful person?

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Money
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 is the basic need for the community to fulfil their daily activities. Some public believe that
success
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 is often measured by people's
wealth
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 and belonging goods. In my opinion, I think that others
factors
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also
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 make a
person
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 successful and I will explain my reasons for it in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, there are many reasons why some public think that
success
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 is often measured by
wealth
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 and belonging materials.
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 and foremost, we cannot deny the importance of
money
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 in people's life along with belonging goods but it is not the only factor to being a successful
person
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.
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, Footballer Cristiano Ronaldo in his early time he has no any cars and big houses but at the current time due to earning a lot of
money
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 and having expensive cars including "ROLCE ROYAL" he is a great example of a successful
person
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 in the world.
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,
money
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 and
wealth
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also
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 make people successful.
On the other hand
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, there are
also
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 other
factors
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 which make individuals successful.
Firstly
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, good leadership skills which is a good advantage for managers to manage their staff and their work, which helps them to grow their company more rapidly and get
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 in their career.
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, getting an "A" grade on the exam is
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 a
success
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 for students.
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, a climber climbing a mountain in a short period of time is
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 a factor of
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,
hence
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,
success
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 has many
factors
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 and it differs from
person
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 to
person
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. It is difficult to measure
success
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,
this
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 is because every
person
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 has a different goal. To conclude, after considering all, I think that
wealth
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 and belonging goods are not the only
factors
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 to make the public successful.
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, leadership skills and hard work to get good grades in exams along with climbing mountains are
also
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factors
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 of
success
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.
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