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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? what are the benefits of travelling for travellers?

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 different countries in 2019 in terms of
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 categories. Overall,
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 countries, while there are some specific characteristics in each country. It is clear that the percentage of middle
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 group is highest in all
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 in these
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 countries. Singapore can see the highest proportion at
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, followed by Japan at 60% and Kenya at nearly 60%.
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 is shown to be just 2% in Kenya, while over six times and fourteen times that figure can be seen in Singapore and Japan respectively. On the final point to note is considerable variations seen in the
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younger generations
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 the figure of Singapore and Japan, at 12%.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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