In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very importatant for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Nowadays,
people
in
few
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countries around the world argue that
have
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having
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a
home
is
necessary
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more necessary
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than renting. A
House
is
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a
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as
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a
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place
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a place
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for
people
living
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to live
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, it has an important part to support
the
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a
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quality
life
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of life
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. Housing issues
is
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are
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one
of
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serious problem for some
people
. The condition
happen
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happens
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because the number of
people
population is getting bigger each year while the space of land is limited.
House
ownership has two
condition
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conditions
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both positive
or
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and
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negative
for
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people
. The positive effect of
have
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having
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a
home
is improving quality of life.
People
who
has
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home
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a home
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will feel secure because they do not have to think about the contact stuff.
Furthermore
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They
also
have
flexibility
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the flexibility
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to decorate their
home
. It can make them feel
comfort
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and in
long
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term help to
more
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be more
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productive. The negative side is about how
people
get the
house
.
For example
,
people
in
developing
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a developing
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country
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countries
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who do not have much income. The price of
house
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the house
a house
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should pay with
the
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apply
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bank credit
with
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for
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years.
Then
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location
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the location
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of the
house
will cost more expensive so
people
should consider where they should
be
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apply
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pick the
house
.
In addition
, Some
people
choose
living
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to live
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in
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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because the price of
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the house
a house
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house
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houses
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is more
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affordable
affrodable
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affordable
. The problem is most of the locations
far
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are far
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from the important public area
such
hospitals
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as hospitals
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,
school
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schools
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,
airport
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airports
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and bus
station
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stations
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. It will
made
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be made
make
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be
problem
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a problem
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when
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they
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the
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they
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have access
one
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to one
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of the services. In conclusion, both
own
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owning
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or rent a
house
depends
of
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on
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the purpose of those.
Get
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Getting
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a
house
will be
priority
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a priority
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when
people
stay for
long
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a long
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time in one location. But for
people
who
has
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have
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to move every single time because of work or
career
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,career
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it is not
best
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the best
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solution.
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