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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays
students
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 are usually given
homework
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 in their schools. Some
group
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 of people suppose that teachers should not give
homework
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for
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to
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 school children, while
another
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others
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argue
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 that it is necessary to give
such
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 work
for
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to
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students
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. Now I am going to discuss both points of view and give my own opinion. There
are
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 no doubt that
practicing
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practising
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 makes perfect.
Homework
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 is helping children to understand
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the topic
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topic
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topics
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 better. They can spend a lot of
time
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 studying and developing themselves.
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 when I was younger I used to do
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everyday
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. Some exercises that I could not do
by
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on
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 my own I did with my parents.
This
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 process helped me to absorb information better and get good marks.
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Moreover
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homework
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take
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 a huge part of their free
time
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, so they do not get bored and do not do bad things like smoking etc.
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hand
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homework
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 is not so necessary.
Students
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 can relax in
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spared
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time
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 rather than doing their tests or practice. They can do extracurricular activities like playing chess, reading
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a book
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book
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books
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 or
be
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being
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 a volunteer.
This
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 will develop them as a person.
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Moreover
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 they can join
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the sport
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sport
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 team
of
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in
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 their schools and become a professional player that will make
theirs
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their
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body
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bodies
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 healthier. They
also
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 will make new teammate friends. In conclusion, I think that teachers should not give
homework
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 to their
students
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. It will be better
to
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 them.
This
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 development will make
students
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 more versatile and friendly. School children will spend more
time
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 with
theirs
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their
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 lovely family and loyal friends.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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