Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, howerver , say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Some individuals argue that exercising infrastructures should be built to prompt public health, while others think that those

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can be replaced by other methods. In my opinion, governments should take several steps to deal with

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problem. It is true that

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hold the view that with more

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, people could exercise regularly and improve their healthy states. If a large number of

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areas can be built, that would offer

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places to both strengthen their bodies and refresh their minds.Without those

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, people in their spare time

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stay at home more to go after other alternative recreations ,

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as computer games, which are popular with teenagers and would not only do harm to their eyesight

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lead to obesity. I agree that alternative measures can be applied to care

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public health. On the one hand, junk food and fast food should be restricted by governments through healthy advertisements on

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social media, which could improve the health awareness of the public.

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, encouraging transmits whose living apartments are not far from the companies to walk to work is a good way for those

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not have extra time for doing

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and nowadays, it is normal for many companies and organizations

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a new system which

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employees to do regular exercise not only encourage them to be enthusiastic

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help them to built healthy bodies. Without those measures, it is hard for

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to keep a healthy state.And building modern hospitals with special

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should be built not only in central cities but

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also

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in the suburbs of states by organizations. In conclusion,

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facilities

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can provide

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place to exercise,

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, governments should take more steps to achieve

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goal.