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In many countries, there is shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the country side, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the country?

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In the modern era, the growing
population
 is turning into a shortage of housing due to space and other facilities.
Therefore
, a fair number of experts believe that local government has to think of considering other options
such
 as expanding
cities
 and space utilization and I would like to discuss and provide some upsides and downsides to
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, a growing
population
 is inevitable and at the same time, new towns are
also
 much needed.
Firstly
, creating a new town would be an asset to the public despite skyrocketing
population
growth
.
Secondly
, these new towns will turn into big
cities
 over time and improve the local employment
rate
 as well which would help our
next
 generation.
Furthermore
, constructing these new houses in big
cities
 would attract a phenomenal industry to improve the country's GDP.
In addition
,as the extension happens gradually
this
 is going to put the city name at the top of the
growth
rate
.
For instance
, if the United States of America did not think about Seattle city and these mind-blowing companies like Microsoft and Amazon would not be there and may not see
such
 a
growth
rate
 from the city. As per Google's recent survey findings, 90% of new
cities
 are helping the rest of the country to improve the
growth
rate
 along with employment creation.
However
, Undoubtedly, I strongly believe enabling a new town on the globe is not an overnight task.
On the other hand
,
this
 would require substantial funds and capital in all ways. To overcome that we may need to think of restructuring the
cities
 with the plan and look for open space and construct buildings in a systematic way despite the
growth
 in
population
.
Last
 but not least,
this
 option will keep everything in one place which would enable easy access for all of us. To sum up, no matter what kind of
population
growth
 we have and it is all about our country's
growth
 and the
next
 generation's future. So better to act now in the right way without any
further
 delay. If not we have to pay huge for that neglect.
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