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Country are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many nations, nowadays, are known to be borderless
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 of innovation.
Same
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The same
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 physical
goods
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 are now commonly found in many parts of the world, causing an attitude that each country has lost its uniqueness and become more identical. I, personally, think that the extensive accessibility of the product has several advantages
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, which
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 will be explained in the following paragraphs. One of the main advantages is
people
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that people
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 have a wider range of products to select
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 their interests without any limitations they have experienced in the past.
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,
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 offers convenience for customers to buy things that are known to be unavailable in the country they currently live in.
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, increasing accessibility to imported products
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creates
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 opportunities for individuals in many aspects
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 as business and healthcare. To illustrate, a Thai restaurant owner in the United Kingdom can buy Thai holy basil, a key ingredient for several dishes, from a local supermarket. Another example is a patient with a rare disease can be effectively cured because a doctor prescribes them immediately with a specific medicine imported from other countries.
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, the distribution of
goods
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 worldwide triggers the economy of the country of exporters.
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, revenue made from coffee beans accounted for a significant percentage of Brazil's export value, as a large exporter of coffee beans.
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, each nation can agree to become a partner to trade
goods
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 that they are
specialized
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specialised
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 in or have
capabilities
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the capabilities
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 to produce.
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,
this
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 could lead to mass production
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, which
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 results in
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lower
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 manufacturing
cost
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costs
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,
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apply
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 and higher profit generation.
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, the existence of the same
goods
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 in many countries cannot prove that countries are becoming
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similar,
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 as there are other factors
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such
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, such
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 as people and
culture
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culture,
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 to be considered.
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, I do think that
this
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 is a positive development which has several benefits for both individuals and the national economy, and
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 practice should be continued in the future for global
civilization
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civilisation
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.

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task-response
State your view clearly at the start and keep a balanced view by noting both good and bad sides.
task-response
Give more detail for each idea and use examples that show how people and countries are affected.
coherence
Link ideas well; use clear phrases to show how your point leads to the next. Keep paragraphs focused.
grammar
Some sentences are long and hard to read. Use shorter sentences and check grammar.
lexical
Use simple words from common English; check that your writing mainly uses the top 100 words.
content
Clear position on the issue.
examples
Good use of real-life examples (Thai basil, medicine, Brazil coffee).
structure
Reasonable structure with clear intro, body paragraphs and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • cultural homogenization
  • unique cultural identities
  • cultural diversity
  • consumer choice
  • economic impact
  • international corporations
  • economic disparities
  • local employment opportunities
  • knowledge exchange
  • cultural understanding
  • global unity
  • carbon emissions
  • sustainability
  • standardization
  • quality and safety standards
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