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In some cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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The dramatic
increase
 in
traffic
 makes
catastrophic
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a catastrophic
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 effect on
globe
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the globe
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specially
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 in urban areas. In
this
 essay, I examine the possible reasons for
this
 trend and suggest some
practicle
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practical
practice
 policies that the individuals and competent authorities could implement to reduce the level of
traffic
 in big cities. There are two main reasons
of
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huge
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the huge
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increase
 in the volume of
traffic
 within the city.
Firstly
, most
of
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the
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people can afford to purchase
the
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a
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car
.
This
 is because cars are no longer a luxury item so
it
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they
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 will cheap in cost.
For instance
, everyone could buy a
car
on
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in
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 cash or lease because numerous financial institutions make a plan of
lease
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a lease
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 for
lessee
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the lessee
a lessee
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.
As a result
, several
number of
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people opt lease plan
although
 they can pay
whole
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 amount in one go.
Secondly
, public
transport
considered
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is considered
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as
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unreliable.
This
 is due to overcrowded.
In addition
, for the usage of public
transport
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,transport
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 a passenger needs to stay long on
bus
 station as well as
passenger
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the passenger
a passenger
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 has to reach at
station
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the station
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 before arrival time
otherwise
, they missed the
bus
.
Last
 but not least, people love to commute
on
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in
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 their own
car
 regardless
the
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of the
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 distance they need to cover.
Although
 they can cover
this
 distance just simply through walk
but
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still
they
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prefer
car
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a car
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.
Consequently
, air pollution may occur. There are viable measures to solve
this
 issue. One effective solution is
enhance
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to enhance
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 the efficiency of
public
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the public
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transport
operation
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operations
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. It will lead to motivate
public
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the public
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 to use public
transport
instead
 of own
car
.
For instance
,
government
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the government
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 should introduce
new
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a new
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 number of buses as well as they should
delineat
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delineate
 the maximum limit of
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a passenger
the passenger
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passenger
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passengers
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 in one
bus
. In case of extra person in the
bus
then
 fine and penalties should be imposed. Another possible way to deal with
traffic
issue
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issues
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by
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is by
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 introducing
the
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apply
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taxes on new purchase
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of car
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car
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cars
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.
Likewise
,
increase
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 the registration cost
it
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will certainly help to curb the use of
private
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the private
a private
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car
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cars
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. In conclusion, the limitation of
large
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a large
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 amount of
traffic
 has been increased due to
increase
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the increase
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 in private cars within the society. By enhancing
the
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public
transport
 proficiency and
enact
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enacting
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 new laws on new cars,
traffic
 issues can be mitigated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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