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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

#plans #show #park #first
The diagrams outline the differences between the old and new development of Grange
park
. Overall, there are new features added
into
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this
 public
park
such
 as
children’s
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a children’s
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 play area, an
entrance
 through to
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
,
cafe
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a cafe
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,
water
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a water
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 feature on the right side of
entrance
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 and an amphitheatre on the left.
To begin
 with, the position of both entrances
remain
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 unchanged.
However
, the fountain
was
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in the centre of the main
entrance
 has been ameliorated and turned into a rose garden
which
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surrounded by seats.
In addition
, the right side of the
park
 has new facilities, the pond has been changed to a playground for kids with a water feature and
cafe
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a cafe
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next
 to it, which was originally a rose garden and a glasshouse. There is
also
 a new
entrance
 to and from the underground car
park
.
Last
 but not least, the rose garden on the left
next
 to
Arnold
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the Arnold
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 Avenue
entrance
 is the only remained feature. Moving forward
to
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the stage for musicians,
it
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has been removed and replaced by a newly built amphitheatre for concerts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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